I swear to god, every time that Cassandra Clare tries to do a bit of ‘original’ worldbuilding, she ends shooting herself in the foot. Seriously, take another look at this passage. Vampires in this universe use motorcycles that run on ‘demonic energy’ and so they can get around faster and easier at night.
The demonic vampiric motorcycles don’t make sense because I know for a fact that Clare’s vampires not only have enhanced senses, they are in fact super fast as well. With the vampires’ extra abilities they could can easily just run around the city and probably get there faster than on a motorcycle.
I also want to talk about is this ‘demonic enegery’ thing. Clare has never established that demons have energy that can be harnessed as a power source in the previous chapters. Not only Clare didn’t even try to subtlety foreshadow this piece of worldbuidling in Part I, but Clare out of nowhere pulls this bit of so-called world building straight out of her posterior. This is just another case of her sloppy worldbuilding
The last thing that I want to talk about was why this scene and the practical prank scene (which I will diffidently be talking about later on this week) was so necessary that Clare just had to add it to the book?
It does nothing to move the plot forward, and it sure in the hell didn’t add any piece of necessary characterization. So why write these motorcyles in this scene, to begin with? I really feel that this portion of the scene should have been cut, but I will go further to say that Chapter 11 and Chapter 12 should have been combined. I really want to know what Clare’s editor actually did to edit this book, because from where I’m sitting it really looks like her editor just sat on her ass and did absolutely nothing, and it’s just downright shameful.
ETA 8/3/2016: Sorry guys, but I just realized that on the panels it says this passage was taken from Chapter 11, but it was actually taken from Chapter 12. It’s way too late to change because I’m currently working on Chapter 15. Fortunately, the next week’s panels are correctly labeled.