And we’re back folks!. We are currently two chapters (not counting the epilogue) towards the end. Let’s not delay any longer, and let’s get started with this chapter!
My first bone to pick with this passage is actually a bigger criticism for this entire chapter itself. Out of nowhere, out of the freaking blue, CASSANDRA CLARE DECIDES TO JUST SWITCH THE POV FROM THIRD PERSON LIMITED TO FIRST PERSON!!!
What the fuck was Cassandra Clare thinking when she writing this passage?! Seriously, there is a reason why people, for the most part, stick with one style of POV throughout their entire book. The reason for this is because if you switch the POV out nowhere, it takes your readers out of the book. It also fucks with a reader’s suspension of belief. This is a cardinal sin of writing. This type of shit right here could literally make or break your book. If I was just a casual reader and not writing this blog at all , I would have stopped reading this book immediately and never picked it up again.
And speaking of Cardinal sins of writing, this whole chapter has to be the biggest example of telling and not showing. This is an undiluted info dump!. Cassandra Clare just put all the action and tension to a freaking stop to FUCKING HAVE STORYTIME FOR AN ENTIRE FUCKING CHAPTER! Why did we need all of this information? Why couldn’t we at the very least have some dialogue and action instead of this barely disguised exposition? I would have even taken a FREAKING FLASHBACK over this shit any day.Yet, instead, we are stuck listening to Luke whole life story.