This scene right here kills a good portion of the tension that we gained at the end of the last chapter. As a writer you have the build the tension and keep it through out the chapter and maybe leak a little bit of it into the next chapter. This scene with Clary’s neighbor Dorthea was really unnecessary. I don’t honestly know why this scene is here, and what purpose it’s supposed to have other than shitty foreshadowing.
I also want to talk about Dorthea. If I was feeling generous (which I’m not after the clusterfuck which was the last chapter) can give Dorthea’s scene a pass, because this character is a old nosy neighbor. However, logically it would be reasonable to assume that a person like Dorthea would automatically call the police. Especially when it’s more than obvious that what’s happening in Clary’s apartment sounds more like a fight to me than Jocelyn moving something. To me, this feels like a plot hole. However, Dorthea is waiting outside like an idiot, because she is so wants to chew out Jocelyn or Clary? Why does no one in this goddamn book so far have any self preservation?
ETA: Yeah, I changed the colors for the quotes from an off red to the same purple as the website so everything matches better. I think this will be the last time I do that for a while, unless it’s for another special post.
ETA #2: So I forgot to tell you guys that this is going to be a lightweight week. It’s one post a day, and then I will be off on Friday. I will return on Monday to start on a new chapter with two posts a day!